Ammika
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SCP-5338
(I would also be happy with 4206 if the number 5338 isn't good, something secretly relevant and four digits like that)
"The time booth with a few bugs"

I would especially like help with the following:

  • Advice on how to/if I should add more Official SCP things, like quotes/interviews or procedures or something.
  • Is it clear that there are meant to be some anachronisms? Because anachronisms. The whole thing is basically a puzzle of what the backstory might be, the dated references especially.
  • I feel like a couple of places (mostly how invoking maintenance and submitting numbers work) may be too wordy, any suggestions on how to fix that?
  • Should the experiments have a slower burn…? I feel like we should more steadily climb to the final experiment but I’m 1. not sure what to add, and 2. worried it would lessen the impact of the ending, as well as making everyone look dumb for letting it obviously escalate.

Fun fact I kind of want to be more evident: I wasn’t inspired by Doctor Who at all, literally only noticed it sounded like a TARDIS (ie booth-shaped machine what does time things) once I was done conceptualizing it and ended up putting it on BBC property for unrelated reasons.

Seriously, a huge thank you to anyone who's willing to do all this reading and help me with my writing!