Westrin: I hope you don't mind, but is it alright if we use this collapsible as a means to easily talk to each other, either that, or we could just use PMs.
notgull: works for me
notgull: alright, what direction do you want to take the dialogue in?
Westrin: I want the flies to be insufferable, and I want to make it sound like they're trying way too hard to be courteous, and then pissy when the researcher tells them no.
notgull: Sounds good to me, but you can't forget the good ol' NiceGuyTM rage when they find out they get rejected.
Westrin: Ah yes, the most important part. I'll see if I can get a draft of an interview up tomorrow.
Westrin: Welp, because of the 72 hour jam, and the reddit contest as well, will be focusing on that for the time being. Hope that's aight with you.
notgull: I do like it, though it definitely needs more meat.
notgull: I beefed up the interview a little bit. I still feel like it needs more setup, and more payoff.
Westrin: I've fixed up the spacing a bit. I really like what you did. Regarding the setup and payoff thing, what about the skip ending on a containment breach of SCP-XXXX, The Foundation finds out that SCP-XXXX somehow gained access to the internet, and was going to go on a blind date with a woman he found online. He goes out, steals a katana, a trilby (that he thinks is a fedora), and goes to meet the woman.
The woman immediately runs away screaming because a bowl of dead flies is talking to her, and is then recontained. Afterwards he remarks: "That's what I thought. They don't understand chivalry even if it hit them square in the face."
notgull: I think that might make the skip overstay its welcome. But now that you mention it, there are three parts to every skip: setup, escalation, and subversion. The question is whether the interview works as escalation, or subversion, and what part we're missing…
Westrin: Honestly I feel like the interview is subversion, and the main SCP itself is setup. So because of that it feels like we're jumping a huge gap into the interview without warning. I've added a text conversation between SCP-XXXX and a woman before the interview. Tell me what you think of it!
notgull: Hmm, I feel like that that's subversion too. Maybe instead we could do a test log to escalate it?
Westrin: Sorry, life stuff got in the way. I don't know what an test log would add. I was thinking an interview with the creator of XXXX. He states that it was an accident, but he's actually starting to get along with the bowl of dead flies.
notgull: Sounds good to me. Do you mind throwing that together?
Westrin: Yeah. Expect it this weekend.
Westrin: Kay, it's done. Tell me what you think, tweak it, edit it, all that jazz. EDIT Oh yeah, and I propose that the mainlist title be "NiceFly".
notgull: Edited the log through for readability. Do you think it's ready for the Drafts forum? Also, I propose the title "Bowl of Flies".
Westrin: Yeah, I agree with "Bowl of Flies". Also, I think it is ready for crit now. Could ya be the one to make a thread?
Westrin: Okay, so, my idea is that we should add a bit more characterization for the bowl except "It's an asshole." My idea was that originally it's an asshole, but we learn about how it feels like a piece of shit all the time, and how it assumes the "Identity" of a nice guy as a way of distracting himself from how he feels irl. It back fires all the time.
notgull: I like it. Go for it.
Westrin: I have returned from life/other drafts, and I'm here to rework the last interview. Expect it done in a week's time.
Westrin: So, do you think it's ready?
notgull: I think we should make SCP-XXXX more like a sterotypical "douchebag" sort of character, instead of focusing in on the nice guy thing. Other than that, I like it.
notgull: Kinda came back, edited it through, LMK what you think
Westrin: Sorry for being way for basically the entire month of october, I like the changes. A quick question: there's a source to a picture of a ceramic bowl before the SCP, are we using an image? If so, how are we gonna incorporate the fly bit into it?
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