SCP-2082
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-2082
Rewrite: http://calibribold.wikidot.com/2082-rewrite
strong improvement
This is way better. I'm a fan.
The original was solid, but this new one adds a lot more depth to the story in a new and interesting way.
Signed off by:
stormbreath
Limeyy
weizhong
SCP-238
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-238
Rewrite: http://grave-box.wikidot.com/malycegraves:238-rewrite
238 is a competent rewrite that hews close to the original. I don't personally care for it, but it's a valid rewrite.
I've critted this while Malyce was drafting. It's solid enough, and will definitely survive, so I'm all good with it. Have to agree it's not my cup of tea either though.
Agreeing with the others. It'll do.
Signed off by:
stormbreath
Limeyy
weizhong
SCP-900
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-900
Rewrite: http://scpdsandbox.wikidot.com/collab:gooday-lizard-900-rewrite
This is solid enough. Improvement over the original definitely, don't have much more to add
The original is fairly bland, but the new one adds some more interesting backstory and context to the story. Overall, much better, imo.
Signed off by:
Limeyy
weizhong
SCP-643
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-643
Rewrite: http://scpdsandbox.wikidot.com/scp-643
With large cuts to the first half and it bridging to the second much nicer, I'm a bigger fan of this. It definitely still feels a touch longer than it needs to be, but the last 75% still slaps and that's good enough for me
Yes, this is much longer, but I think the new story is much more compelling than the old one, which was a pretty bog-standard compulsion object. It's a slow burn to start, but the course of the story is significantly better.
Signed off by:
weizhong
Limeyy
stormbreath
SCP-649
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-649
Rewrite: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/temporary-sandbox
Pretty basic rewrite, all in all, but it's better than the original, I think. The payoff is the same, but it's built up to in a better way.
Is this a rewrite? I think the previous entries in this list have all brought something new to the table, but this strikes me as the exact same article. To that end I feel uncomfortable signing off on it.
I like 649 a lot, very pure rewrite that just takes the orginal and expands it a bit.
Signed off by:
weizhong
SCP-031
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-031
Rewrite: http://scpsandboxwiki.wikidot.com/clef
I like the new direction a lot, but I think that incorporating historical and horror elements make the piece a bit unfocused and perhaps bloated. Tightening the focus and shaping up the overall structure would be beneficial.
I quite dislike the new direction personally and the redactions/focus on body horror mechanics hurt it. Unlikely to sign off on it.
Honestly, I'm just a big fan. I'm partial to the in-universe rewrite type articles.
I like 031, in universe rewrites are a cool thing that doesn't happen much and gives a piece more leeway in terms of differences
Signed off by:
stormbreath
SCP-1699
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1699
Rewrite: http://kontainer.djkakt.us/sigma:tyumen-1699-rewrite
UPDATED REWRITE: N/A
Alright, I think 1699 is fine but longer than it needs to be. I'd approve it if they cut short the logs a bit.
Signed off by:
Riemann, weizhong, stormbreath,
SCP-629
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-629
Rewrite: http://topia.wikidot.com/scp-629
Strong and good article on its own. Very major revision, however it is exactly as DarkStuff described it would be when requesting the article. Further, it is a Little Mister and still fits the initial concept of "Mr. Brass", so I feel this is a special circumstance and am inclined to approve.
This is so different from the original 629 concept, but honestly, like storm said, I'm not opposed to it. It's a much stronger article than the original, but I still hesitate somewhat precisely because it's veers off course so hard, and we have a precedent for not allowing this. I can accept this article being the way that it is, so long as DarkStuff makes some tweaks to return the basic form of Mr. Brass to being more like the "clockwork" nature of the original, so we maintain that at least.
EDIT: In light of the new directive re:rewrite deviation, full steam ahead.
Signed off by:
stormbreath
SCP-1573
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1573
Rewrite: http://kaktuskontainer.wikidot.com/sigma:jakdragonx-1573
Pretty diverged from the original but overall close.
Did Tim Berners-Lee make this anomaly? Big fan of some of the aesthetics - I didn't realise how much I missed some of those "the purpose of this is unknown" lines. I think this would be stronger without the interview log and end note - don't really work for me. But otherwise pretty interesting.
I really like this one. The overall imagery is creepier than the original, and mixes in the right amount of horror without making it over the top. The interview log actually works well for me, though the note is just fine. Regardless, well done. I know you're reading this Jak, so there ya go.
If it doesn’t clash with the backlinks then sure
Signed off by:
stormbreath, Riemann, weizhong, Modern_Erasmus
Keter Duty
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/roget-s-proposal
Rewrite: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/collab:keter-duty
http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/collab:ihp
Collaborative Log:
http://kaktuskontainer.wikidot.com/extended-files-scp-001
Noting that ihp and shaggy plan on opening up a collaborative section to add other combinations. Have provided an example of this above.
This slaps. No further comment needed.
I mean, yeah. This honks.
Signed off by:
weizhong, stormbreath, Riemann
SCP-821
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-821
Rewrite: http://smlt.wikidot.com/laneous:3
UPDATED REWRITE: http://smlt.wikidot.com/laneous:3
A little trite, but nothing too bad. Solid work.
I don't love this story and how it's changed from the original, but it's an acceptable rewrite. Really don't like how it's slapping me in the face with the story though.
It'd be better if the log was half as long, but it's not really a rewrite without the log.
Agreed that 821 is pretty good but needs a shorter log desperately
It's a rewrite.
I think it's about 20% too long still
It's acceptable. Not the best rewrite, but it'll do.
Signed off by:
stormbreath, weizhong
SCP-1507
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1507
Rewrite: http://kaktuskontainer.wikidot.com/everyday-business
Recognizable to the original article.
something something not an SCP something something
Signed off by:
stormbreath, Riemann
SCP-1684
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1684
Rewrite: http://topia.wikidot.com/scp-1684-rewrite
The logs and characterisation are clunky and wooden. I don't know if it'll survive, but given the stakes I'm fine with approving.
strong improvement over the original; I don't have a problem with the logs.
Signed off by:
Riemann, stormbreath
SCP-496
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-496
Rewrite: http://kaktuskontainer.wikidot.com/vivarium-8
I find the original article to be pretty boring, and this, while not spectacular, is still better than the original. I do think the repetition of "under the sea" is unintentionally hilarious (in a bad way), because I couldn't stop thinking about the Little Mermaid.
Is a rewrite.
It's technically competent? Like, I don't like any part of it, but I like the original less. I worry this might not survive.
Signed off by:
weizhong, stormbreath, Riemann I guess?
SCP-570
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-570
Rewrite: http://scpdsandbox.wikidot.com/steak1
UPDATED REWRITE: http://scpdsandbox.wikidot.com/resteak
I don't love it but it'll probably survive
It's acceptable, but survivable. Will provide some crit.
It's good enough for what it needs to be.
Not sure how I feel about 570, feels like too much of a departure and overall eh
I think this version of the rewrite is significantly better than the original one. The anomaly has not been changed, but the presentation and buildup is much improved compared to the first rewrite. Interesting execution of the same themes, and genuinely creepy.
It is a rewrite.
I don't know what it is about people and "my anomaly knows all about the Foundation" but it's a trope I don't love. Also not a huuuuuge fan conceptually of some of the more obvious "This log is spooky to be spooky" parts, but overall not bad. I think it'll do well.
Signed off by:
weizhong, stormbreath, Riemann
SCP-1277
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1277
Rewrite: http://kaktuskontainer.wikidot.com/scp-1277-rewrite
Not good, but it's a valid rewrite.
Concurring with storm that there are larger extant issues with this as far as tone and formatting. The whole… stalking of this poor woman doesn't really sit right with me. Makes me feel like I'm supposed to feel sympathy but it doesn't come off well. On one hand, the article does have these issues. On the other hand, I have been in the desert on a horse with no name, so…
Agreeing with what everyone else said. A lot of small issues, and the creepy stalking doesn't play well for me.
Signed off by:
stormbreath
SCP-1559
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-1559
Rewrite: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/birdsong-rewrite
Similar with the 1684 rewrite, it's clunky and awkward. Kinda cute though.
Solid expansion of the original article.
Signed off by:
Riemann, stormbreath
SCP-039
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-039
Rewrite: http://scp-sandbox-3.wikidot.com/kothardarastrix (SCP-039 tab)
I think it gets weaker as it goes on - notably the interviews with 039-A don't really hold my interest. But all in all a solid article and expounds on the original.
It's acceptable. I think it's about twice as long as it needs to be, and the journals do nothing to hold my interest or really give me all that much new information, so I think they could be significantly trimmed down. However, elements of the interview are solid (though 100 bucks a month on food seems absurdly low for a Foundation researcher and took me right out of the narrative), and the ending line was a nice way to finish it off. I'd like it a lot more if the focus were tighter and the journals didn't have that same lackadaisical tone that so many other articles do, but it'll probably survive.
Signed off by:
Riemann, weizhong
SCP-359
Original: https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/scp-359
Rewrite: http://scpdsandbox.wikidot.com/toprewrite
significant improvement and a good draft. needs css work.
Putting down one of the longest outstanding rewrites on the site is already great. The fact that this draft is quite good is a cherry on top.
wikidot ate my comment where I read this and cba to write it out again but the short of it is that it's good.
Signed off by:
stormbreath, Riemann, weizhong, Limeyy