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DISCLAIMER: This critique is coming from someone who knows nothing about bees.
SCP-XXXX is currently being contained inside its original discovery site since it poses no threat to the population at large.
SCP-XXXX is contained at its location of discovery. (Btw, what is with the inclusion of "since it poses no threat to the public at large"? If it was a threat, would the Foundation just take it to their facilities? The foundation only contains an object at the location of its discovery if they have no other choice)
Foundation front is to be built1.
Has been built.
the event of civilian questioning
Remove " a"
Dr Cole, head researcher of the SCP-XXXX project, is currently piloting F.A.R.
Unless it is extremely important, I don't think the Foundation would need one specific guy to be controlling a robot.
SCP-XXXX has been infiltrated, with a
Replace "with" with "utilizing". Remove the comma too.
the only difference being anomalous dimensional warps at each corner of SCP-XXXX
With the sole differentiation of two-dimensional ellipsoid rifts at each corner of SCP-XXXX.
SCP-XXXX-1 are the attendants/employees of SCP-XXXX, managing entry and exit schedules, and offering services to guests. These instances are of our own current timeline/dimension.
Ngl Cole, I got 0% clue about what you're trying to say here. If they are bees, just say they're bees and what do you mean by "of our own current timeline/dimension"?
SCP-XXXX-2 are different variants of the regular honeybee,
SCP-XXXX-2 is the collective designation for variations of regular honey bees
Also, how does the Foundation know if they are in different timelines whilst different dimensions cuz I'm a little confused right now.
SCP-XXXX-2-1 looks similar to SCP-XXXX-1, the feature differentiating it being a pair of mandibles, not dissimilar to an ant of the Camponotus spp4 variant.
SCP-XXXX-2-1 appears similarly to SCP-XXXX-1, with the sole differentiation of it be a pair of mandibles. (The rest I don't understand, primarily because I know nothing about ants. You can add the rest if you want)
uses a form of telekinesis to hover
Utilizes telekinesis as a form of levitation.
plants look as if they are derivative from an original plant from our current dimension. These have been given the SCP-XXXX-3 designation.
Just say they look like plants of an unknown species cuz I was confused when I first read this. For the designation part, replace the full stop with "and has been designated as SCP-XXXX-3".
Speaking of destinations, replace all of the last parts of them (I.e 2-1, 2-2, 2-3) with 2-A, 2-B and 2-C. It makes it less confusing to determine the specific designations.
This variant has
SCP-XXXX-3-A possess
This variant has a thicker root. It subsides
This variant possesses a thicker root and it subsides
which has caused many trees to perish in the area.
Which caused many trees to neutralise in the area
The following is written by what F.AR could observe.
The following log describes observations taken from F.A.R.
assuring that criminal or terrorist acts will not take place.
What kind of criminals or terrorists would take place in a beehive? Now, Cole, I know before you decide to remove this part all because I questioned it, I want you to take a step back and ask yourself, "Who would go after these bees, besides the Foundation and GOC? Why do they care and what are they trying to achieve?"
(So Rose, what are your overall thoughts?)
I felt bored because there's just nothing that hooks me. 90% of what the article tells me is that it's just an extra-dimensional hive filled with bees that make no sense. That's it.
It doesn't use the bees/baskets mentioned in some way, it doesn't try to tell the reader a story using these bees, it just tells me what they are, what they do and that's it. It would pretty much be the same without them. There's no narrative, either.
I guess the project addition added some level of purpose since it was used to see the hive and the incident but that's it. I'm not sure if it would be the same if F.A.R was created or not, either.
I don't see what the bees would care if the tickets are legitimate or not. Like, do they have rivals that want to overthrow their settlement? Do they have a history of encountering spies? If so, that would be a good start to adding a narrative. I don't even know what the tickets are for, either.
I'm going to use 4011 as an example of what a settlement is with its characters. SCP-4011 is an abandoned Foundation site on Mars, inhabited by robots. These robots mostly protect/look acter they're settlement and despite who it's created from, the Foundation never knew they made it. (I strongly recommend that you read it to get a better of idea of how to create a settlement)
If you are going to come up with a narrative, I'd suggest removing the baskets and flowers since they feel unnecessary UNLESS they add something to the narrative your thinking of.
I also recommend you try and take your time to flesh out your article a bit; read what other articles have, come up with ideas that will improve it, figure out what other purposes do the bees serve other than just mentioning them, characterise the bees, tell a story, do something.
Btw, I hope you do well in the future. Good luck, man. I know deep down you can do it.
