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Hello, my name is Rose the Changeling and today I'll be critiquing A Camping Story Continues, written by CJandSane4Life129. Because Wattpad does not allow me to copy and paste text from it's stories for some stupid reason, I won't be quoting everything from it.
We start off the page cover and it feels boring.
"Jean Luc said "Hello Bluey" and this is the story of what happened after Jean Luc said "Hello Bluey" and it's gonna be awesome and romantic. 🐶♥️🐶"
That's it?! Jean said hello and their already in-love with each other? That's all I'm getting? No build up, no how they got along with each other or what they do with their lives, just "hello"? Common, surely you can do better than that. More importantly, where's the credit for this artwork, who drew it? There's nothing on the story cover that tells that.
We move on the first chapter, and- no, no it isn't really a chapter at all. I don't know what purpose it serves, either. This isn't even a book, either. It's a fictional story.
"Please vote and follow me for more fanfics on your favorite cartoons."
Not interested.
"Super duper secret:
(I'm not actually 13, I faked my age I'm actually 12, don't tell)"
Congratulations, you ruined your secret. CJ, while I know your a little kid whom will get better and improve overtime as you grow as a writer, I want to give you some critique regardless just to give that extra boost of help when it comes to writing.
CJ also added some acronyms which… I don't what purpose they serve honestly.
- BL - Bluey
- JL - Jean Luc/John Luke (I don't know)
- Bi - Bingo
What do you mean you don't know, his name is literally Jean Luc and when I first read that, I got so confused. Why are they there? Why use acronyms and not just type their names? For what? I then later assumed it was going to be one of those formats where people type "[Insert name]: [Insert text of he/she/them talking]" and wouldn't you know, I was right.
"Mom is mom and Dad is dad"
"You'll figure out the rest as we go."
Figure what out, what are you talking about? Oh and this figure out thing did not age well, btw as I move on. Since this chapter serves little to no purpose of the storyline, I strongly recommend you remove it.
I now move on to the next chapter and its short, mainly because CJ has writers block. There's nothing much or interesting going on for this chapter, just Jean saying hi to Bluey and she being happy to see him.
