The Waste of Time Machine
The Waste of Time Machine
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Elevator Pitch: New anomalous business producing custom objects, the 'waste of time machine' is the first one.
Central Narrative: The skip documents how the business was created, by who and why. The device does not work initially. The foundation enters after the fact and pieces together the information from recovered documents (research notes, accounts, correspondence, etc).
Also recovered are prototypes that are still dangerous. They have failed (exploded?) and need to be contained.
The WTM operates by 'transferring' time from one thing to another (i.e. ageing / de-ageing).
Hook/Attention-Grabber: Ho do anomaly creators resolve containment breaches?
Additional Notes: After some errors (both story and procedural), I hope that I've been able to refine the concept.
Further reading is below. The narrative I posted below is still valid, but the initial idea pitch is superseded by this one.
Thank you for your time.
http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-13339289/for-critique:the-waste-of-time-machine
Why did the creator create?
What actually happens and why?
Zed is setting up his own company. Formally an employee of Anderson Robotics, Zed has taken a much greater interest in the ‘magic’ side of anomalous technology. After directing/leading the department responsible for consumer applications of ‘non-reality-bound objects’, AR has helped finance a spin-out company for products not keeping with AR focus.
Zed receives significant help from AR (though mainly financial), as well as personal contacts, but is for now, a single-person business.
Whilst ‘toying with forces beyond your ken’ is fairly standard stuff, I want to take a ‘Victorian’ attitude with this; Victorian age Britons were big believers that science and engineering could conquer natural obstacles. Why not ‘unnatural’ ones, too?
Zed makes custom, one-off or limited run, items that resemble antiques more than modern technology. The WTM is mostly conventional looking clockwork attached to some kind of thaumaturgic regulator, and then to a component that does the actual work.
Through whatever means, this device transfers ‘time’ from one object to another (one becomes old, the other becomes young).
During the creation of this machine, something goes wrong (see below). My current thinking is that it overloads, and instead of depositing the extracted time into the desired object, this excess time is released as an explosion.
The created problems would be a part of the skip. Some of which actually contribute to helping the Foundation. I’m thinking that research journals, electronic devices (and so on) could be affected, such as being left in place for all time.
The Foundation comes in after the fact, prototypes of the machine are recovered. Through what’s left of the research that can still be understood, are able to comprehend the nature of the device and what they should do with it.
What events happen?
In terms of the ‘something goes wrong’ bit. When an engine is running heat is created as a waste product. This is because no conversion of energy is 1:1. What happens when you attempt to convert ‘time had’ to ‘time remaining’. I’m trying to think of some kind of ‘time friction’ that overloads the machine and destroys it.
Feedback:
So, I kinda like this premise. It's a fun idea, although I'm unclear on the exact parameters of the mechanics. In my head, it can reduce the age of one object and age another object, but I'm not sure if that's what you have in mind? This line, in particular, confused me:
In the case of the 'Waste of Time Machine' imagine having a pocket dimension created just for you to (for example) read a textbook and have no time pass 'outside'.
Narrative wise, this needs more detail. You've got the narrative premise and subtext, but you haven't given us the detail of what actually happens and why. What events happen and what's their throughline? That's the big thing missing here. Personally, the exploration of the character wouldn't be my favourite direction to take this, but I can see it being strong if well written, especially if the character becomes one the reader can empathise with. Try to expand on the characterisation you're going to have here as well, and what motions they are going to go through. I'd also potentially want to see a bit on how you plan on telling this story to the reader. Is it going to be exclusively his research notes, and what from will these notes take (diary, experiment logs, etc)?
I hope this feedback is helpful.
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Elevator Pitch: Foundation operatives called to location at request of anomalous device creator. His own research notes and journals are used to determine the dangerous nature of the SCP.
Central Narrative: A device which "extracts time" from one object and "adds" it to another. The creator of the machine has contacted the SCP Foundation themselves to report the device (and disappeared) as it is flawed.
An anomalous creator who has a (more or less) responsible attitude to the creation of reality-breaking machines. In the case of the 'Waste of Time Machine' imagine having a pocket dimension created just for you to (for example) read a textbook and have no time pass 'outside'.
I'd like to explore the thinking of someone who would actually create some of these things. In this case it would be from the perspective of someone who behaves similar to the Foundation - an experimenter or scientist - breaking apart the unreality to make sense of it, and make something. This is partly to simply make it much easier as a first time writer, as it allows me to present this a a 'reverse-engineered' SCP built from the object creators own notes, research, etc.
Hook/Attention-Grabber: An SCP presented (more) from the perspective of a creator of anomalous objects than the Foundation.
Additional Notes: I am not a horror fan, but I like to watch 'Ending Explained' videos telling you all about a particular horror movie. And I think I get the same kind of vibe from the SCP wiki; something explained is something contained. An eldritch-horror is not as terrifying when on a dissection table.
I like the idea that an inherently illogical concept can be approached, not as a "mystery" that requires no further explanation, but as something that can be understood in a logical manner.
There is some similarity with SCP-3701, but I think it's fairly minor as I want to show the process of investigation.
I don't have a firm direction to take this with yet, and I welcome suggestions and prompting questions.
Thank you for your time.
:)
Similar? :
http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-3701
Zed / Zee (?)
Z** Commercial Curiosities (ZCC)
Alternative Real Constructs (ARC)
Alt-Real Constructs
ARC - too similar to Anderson Robotics
SKIP-TBD
The WTM is a free-standing clockwork composed of wood and metal, featuring no electrical components or 'modern' equipment. Facing the user is a large 'ships-wheel' which can only be spun clockwise. The handles of the wheel go on to become the teeth in a second, slightly smaller, wheel (or cog at this point) that sits right-angled to the facing wheel, and attaches to a column mechanism that drives the rest of the machine.
An wooden trough is set into the second cog. Fixed to the base of the shallow trough are three tungsten cones with unknown markings, these are positioned equidistant from each other and pointing up. The trough itself is 0.5cm deep and filled level with powdered pearl, twelve segments of quartz glass are positioned to form a doughnut of glass to prevent the pearl being disturbed, including exact fitting around the base of the cones.
Above the cones are four large discs stacked on top of one another. These are connected to the cog mechanism below via the mechanical column. On the inner-side of each disc are three much thinner discs that contain a wide variety of quartz lenses, filters, coloured glass and shutters. These are all moved over the cones as they turn, variously emphasising, de-emphasising, blocking out, colouring or otherwise altering the image of the cones when seen from directly above.
Sitting atop the mechanical column is a small (approximately 15cm diameter) metal ball. There are three longitude and twelve latitude lines deeply cut into it, each of which is tightly wrapped in copper wire. When the machine is in operation, gear or clockwork noise can be heard from within the ball. These sounds resemble industrial machinery, far larger than could be contained within, and seemingly from great distance.
To the left and right of the main wheel, are two struts that support large basins, both are made of tungsten. They are offset in height from one another by 20cm, to create a gradient between them. The left-most has gently sloping sides and resembles a large wok. A grate has been cut into the bottom which sits above a funnel and pipe (made of pure silver) to an outlet that pours into the right bowl. This bowl is differently shaped, with a flat bottom and nearly vertical sides.
A safety system initially prevents the wheel from being turned anticlockwise, if rotation stops before a single rotation is completed weights will pull the wheel back to its starting position. Upon one full rotation, the main mechanism is activated. The machine requires ten full rotations of the main wheel to complete a single rotation of the four discs (which rotate at different speeds), at which point the device will activate. During the 'wind-up' phase a similar safety system to the first is also deployed; if rotation stops before ten rotations are completed, the machine will reverse and reset.
At the moment ten rotations are complete, an arc of something resembling lightning, with a slight yellow/orange hue, strikes the metal ball from each of the cones simultaneously. Immediately after a faint, sickly-green, glow appears within the left-hand basin. This glow also extends out of the basin in what is believed to be an inversion of the bowl-shape. This is presumed as the 'glow' rapidly loses coherence and stability as it approaches its terminus.