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SCP-5xxx object class: —Euclid— Neutralized

Special Containment Procedures:

Site-5xxx is to be built as a monitoring station for A 100M by 100M perimeter fence is to be constructed around SCP-5xxx-1 with guards armed with standard foundation issue tranquilizer rifles. anybody attempting to enter SCP-5xxx-1 is to be taken into foundation custody and administered class B Amnestics and brought to the nearest police station. Any change in behavior for SCP-5xxx-2-8 is to be monitored and reported to the site director immediately. remote drones will be used to survey the inside of areas of SCP-5xxx at all times No containment procedures are necessary as of Incident-5xxx-B

description:
SCP-5xxx is the collective name given to a time loop that was created on February 17th 19██
encompassing the area of medium sized cottage located in hwhwhwh Ohio and the individuals living in said time loop. SCP-5xxx-1 is a time loop that lasts for twenty-four (24) hours before resetting, however inside the time loop the loop lasts for approximately 2 months. The reason for this difference in SCP-5xxx’s local time is currently unknown. SCP-5xxx are the individuals stuck inside the time loop, SCP-5xxx-2-4 being the father mother and son residing on the property and SCP-5xxx-5-8 being 4 currently unknown individuals. None of the Inhabitants possess the ability to leave the confines of SCP-5xxx-1. Every loop ends the same way the only differences being the events that lead to the final result. Each Loop ends when SCP-5xxx-8 expires via suicide. SCP-5xxx-8 is always the last remaining inhabitant of the time loop and it is speculated that the Loop only resets when all persons inside have died. The rest of the inhabitants die at around the same time for every loop with few exceptions (see incident 5xxx-A. The following is a log with the individual, the cause of death and time of death in the order they occur

SCP-5xxx-2 gets sick after ingesting food that had spoiled and succumbs to his illness. 9 hours and 30 minutes into loop

SCP-5xxx-4 trips and falls from the down the stairs and dies from blunt force trauma. 14 hours and 54 minutes into loop

SCP-5xxx-3 and SCP-5xxx-6 accuses the other of poisoning SCP-5xxx-2’s food they fight. SCP-5xxx-3 stabs SCP-5xxx-6 and SCP-5xxx-6 shoots SCP-5xxx-3 with a gun that doesn’t match any guns currently on the market. 17 hours into loop

SCP-5xxx-5 and SCP-5xxx-7 both become paranoid after seeing the fight between SCP-5xxx-4 and SCP-5xxx-5 they accidently stab each other due to being losing their minds from being trapped for 59 days straight. 23 hours and 36 minutes into loop

SCP-5xxx-8 takes a pill believed to be a cyanide tablet. Where it was acquired is currently unknown. 23 hours and 59 minutes into loop.
Every new loop SCP-5xxx-3 attempts to alter the outcome and prevent the deaths of the other inhabitants. he is unsuccessful in all cases except for 1 being Incident-5xxx-A
incident-5xxx-A
Incident-5xxx-A:
SCP-5xxx-3 saves SCP-5xxx-4 from dying by catching her before she makes contact with the ground, however in this loop SCP-5xxx-5 ends up dying from falling and SCP-5xxx-4 becomes crazed and paranoid along side SCP-5xxx-7. all following loop SCP-5xxx-3 stopped trying to prevent the deaths of other individuals trapped with him in the time loop.
After one year of continued observation of SCP-5xxx, SCP-5xxx-3 and SCP-5xxx-8 are seen whispering something to each other at the at approximately 15 hours into the loop, what they are talking about is unknown. At the start of the next loop, SCP-5xxx-3 steals SCP-5xxx-6’s gun and uses it kills SCP-5xxx-8, SCP-5xxx-6, SCP-5xxx-5 and SCP-5xxx-7. SCP-5xxx-2 and SCP-5xxx-4 start panicking, however 9 hours and 30 minutes into the loop when SCP-5xxx-2 is supposed to die nothing happens. All 3 individuals are overjoyed and discover they are able to leave SCP-5022-1. It is believed that killing the 4 unknown individuals broke the loop and suggested that they are somehow responsible for its creation in the first place. When questioned about murdering SCP-5022-5-8, SCP-5022-3 responded by saying “it was the only way, I knew it and he (SCP-5022-8) knew it too”. Clean up crew for site-5022 couldn’t find the bodies of SCP-5022-5-8 and all that was left was a note that read “You will understand soon enough”.
SCP-5022-2-4 have been administered Class A amnestics and send to a local hospital. The cause of their stay has been declared traumatic experience resulting from a burglary, and has also been declared the reason for why the surviving individuals have been missing for one year.

SCP-5022 is now being reclassified as Neutralized.