SCP-3287

Item #: SCP-3287

Object Class: Safe

Special Contain Procedures: The case containing SCP-3287 is to be stored in a standard anomalous items locker at site-89 and guarded by no less than 2 armed personnel at all times. Access to SCP-3287 is prohibited outside of testing. Testing of SCP-3287 is to be conducted only under the supervision of Senior researcher Dr Heimberger and overseen by no less than 5 armed guards.

Description: SCP-3287 is Set of two hundred and forty (240) antique acupuncture pins (designated SCP-3287-1 to SCP-3287-240) each 9cm in length and composed of stainless steel. No brand name or manufacturer could be identified on any of the pins or on the tattered black, velvet lined case they were found in. When a living being is pricked by an SCP-3287 instance, physical capabilities of the surrounding body region will become increased by approximately 50% of what is normally capable for the subject. The original mass of the subjects body does not increase.

This phenomena has been observed to affect all body parts within a 40cm radius around the SCP-3287 instance.The following properties are effected by SCP-3287's effects:

  • reflexes and muscle memory
  • tissue and bone strength
  • physical and cognitive power
  • effectiveness of bodily functions and organs
  • overall quality of the body

This effect will increase with the number of SCP-3287 instances applied, allowing a potential 12000% increase to the capability's of any given area. SCP-3287's effect lasts until removed. Limbs removed from the body after the insertion of an SCP-3287 instance retain it's effect for up to 4 hours after removal. SCP-3287's effects have been discovered to be mildly addictive as subjects have displayed symptoms of withdrawal and unwillingness to surrender SCP-3287 instances to staff after removal. Whether this reaction is due to a secondary anomalous effect or otherwise is currently unknown.

Log of acquisition: SCP-3287 was recovered during a raid on a Marshall, Carter & Dark Ltd auction in the Grand Hotel █████████ in █████████ Germany on 12/06/20██. MTF-Mu-3 (Highest Bidders) was dispatched to the hotel, to acquire anomalous objects put up for auction as well as information regarding the GoI Marshall, Carter & Dark Ltd and its patrons. However approximately 1 hour after infiltration of the auction MTF-Mu-3's cover was blown by the then un-contained SCP-████.

MC&D staff was able to evacuate all patrons and several anomalous lots out of the building while keeping MTF-Mu-3 preoccupied with a male individual who was enhanced through the use of several SCP-3287 instances. 3 team members lost their lives before foundation reinforcements arrived with heavier artillery and overpowered the man. The case storing SCP-3287 was found and secured along with several other anomalous items including SCP-████, and the above mentioned SCP-████. No patrons could be arrested however multiple MC&D employs were detained and later questioned. For full list of interviews see expanded mission report [REDACTED].

Addendum-3287
I know that in light of recent events my proposal may sound like madness but please review the camera feed from the incident and imagine, what it would be like if one of our guys could do that. Without [DATA EXPUNGED] of course.
-Dr Heimberger1

rating: 0+x

Excellent. First up - "Senior researcher" either capitalise both, or neither
<Jazstar>: "SCP-3287 is Set" Set doesn't need capitalisation
<Jazstar>: "No brand name or manufacturer could be identified on any of the pins or on the tattered black, velvet lined case they were found in." You need to establish and describe the case, not just stick it in a sentence
<Jazstar>: "When a living being is pricked by an SCP-3287 instance, physical capabilities of the surrounding body region will become increased by approximately 50% of what is normally capable for the subject."
<Jazstar>: this phrasing is a bit awkward.
<Jazstar>: "physical capabilities of the surrounding body region" in particular
Jazstar>: There's also a missing space between these two words "instance.The"
<Jazstar>: "reflexes and muscle memory" Both of those are actually controlled by the brain, not the body parts in question, so in order for this statement to remain true, you'd have to explicitly state that your skip can affect the brain in relation to body parts within 40cm radius
<Jazstar>: Actually also before I forget - in drafts, you should always use something like SCP-XXXX rather than the number that you want, just in case it gets taken
"retain it's effect" it's = it is. So you'd change this to its
"MTF-Mu-3 (Highest Bidders) was dispatched to the hotel" was —> were
<Jazstar>: also there's a comma after hotel which shouldn't be there
<Jazstar>: "MTF-Mu-3 (Highest Bidders) was dispatched to the hotel, to acquire anomalous objects put up for auction as well as information regarding the GoI Marshall, Carter & Dark Ltd and its patrons. However approximately 1 hour after infiltration of the auction MTF-Mu-3's cover was blown by the then un-contained SCP-████."
<Jazstar>: This whole section actually is a bit storytelling-ish
<Jazstar>: Fair enough ^^
<Jazstar>: So for example, you'd never see "cover is blown" in a clinical report
You also probably don't need to explain MTF-Mu-3's actions in such detail
It's about the skip, remember? There's probably an action report (in universe) to detail with this incident
<Jazstar>: So it would be enough to mention that they were in the area to infiltrate for information gathering, and then secured this skip when they were uncovered.
<Ross>: So, leave out the mission report and maybe do it in a separate document
<Jazstar>: No
<Jazstar>: Unless you're confident writing a tale, nope
"MC&D staff was able to evacuate all patrons and several anomalous lots out of the building while keeping MTF-Mu-3 preoccupied with a male individual who was enhanced through the use of several SCP-3287 instances." Again, this is a bit storytelling. Needs to be made a bit more concise
<Jazstar>: Ross By all means! But for a new writer, just focus on one thing at at time haha
"3 team members lost their lives before foundation reinforcements arrived with heavier artillery and overpowered the man." This needs to become more clinical
(also, for the record, some readers are tired of seeing MTF used as essentially cannon fodder)
<Jazstar>: Good. Anything anyone ever says that you don't understand when getting feedback, ask them to explain
<Zyn>: (these people are supposed to be the best of the best the Foundation has, but new people loooooooooove to have an MTF body count for extra drama)
<Zyn>: (doesn't always work well)
<Jazstar>: "multiple MC&D employs" employees
multiple MC&D employs were detained
The subject was tasked with running 5 laps around the testing hall. The subject completed all 5 laps in record time. Two more pins were added to each leg and the subject was instructed to run another 5 laps around the testing hall. The subject completed the 5 laps, breaking her record from before."
<Ross>: Did I? My bad
<Jazstar>: I'd recommend that instead of noting "record time" and "breaking her record", that you specify the actual times. It's more realistic, and also helps with that clinical tone
"Open heart surgery was performed on D-485639 who suffered from Bradycardia." You have some formatting problems going on after "from"
<Jazstar>: it goes straight to the next line
"Subject's heart begins beating at an impossibly high rate, 550 bpm." Impossibly high rate is another less than clinical phrase. Might be worthwhile deleting it, and instead adding a footnote about what the normal resting BPM is
<Jazstar>: "blood veins" Just veins. They all have blood in them, so you don't need to mention blood haha
No problem. That's why it pays to have extra sets of eyes on your work.
<Zyn>: (also, technically 550 bpm heartrate isn't /impossible/, per se)
<Zyn>: (it's impossible for humans, but hummingbird bpm can be twice that.)
<Zyn>: (either way though, just take that phrase out)
<Jazstar>: "Autopsy later discovered that the subjects heart as well as the veins and blood vessels in an approximately 40cm radius around the puncture mark left behind by SCP-3287 were undamaged by the high blood pressure. " This sentence is a bit… Rambly? Run-on? Can't quite put my finger on it
<Jazstar>: Oh actually, have a look at how you've formatted the Experiment Logs. You have different formatting going on for most of the entries.
"Subjects original lifting and striking strength was recorded and found to be below average." You don't *have* to have numbers, but as with before, it's much more accurate than just "below average"
<Jazstar>: "In the course of the experiment the subject was capable of lifting :a table, Weights of varying heaviness, [REDACTED], a cherry picker and [DATA EXPUNGED]." So you'd also tell me how much these things each weighed
<Jazstar>: "Prior to testing Subject scored an average IQ test score of 88." subject should not be capitalised; that's not how IQ works. 100 is average. 88 is below average.
<Jazstar>: Well, ideally in metric, but yeah, that works I think.
<Jazstar>: "Subject was given increasingly difficult written IQ test and asked to complete them." IQ tests are hours long and take hours to mark
<Jazstar>: And they're not truly indicative of cognitive skill because blah blah blah psych stuff blah blah blah I hate IQ tests because they don't work blah blah blah ignore me
<Jazstar>: You have this poor subject taking 15 IQ tests in a row
<Jazstar>: That's a very long time to be taking IQ tests. And you'd have to account for the fact that with each test, if I remember right, the questions remain the same. So there'd be a degree of memory.
"Subjects final IQ was measured to be 187]" another stray ]
<Jazstar>: "[Incident log D-670998-3456:" Stray [
"At this stage the subjects body held a total of (100) SCP-3287 instances throughout its body" Probably don't need to mention body twice
<Jazstar>: Aaaah. You write "D-670998's IQ returned"
<Jazstar>: You mixed up your d-class
<Jazstar>: Your incident log needs formatting, like, in quotes and italics.