Kothardarastrix's Sandbox
  • Do use the frame narrative, but don't half-ass it.
  • People don't think 173 should be famous in-universe. I disagree, but I don't decide whether my page gets deleted or not. Compromise by having it be well-known at Site-19, at least, which makes more sense and is pretty hard to disagree with. If people still have a problem with it, I will ask them how they think anybody on the Site could not know about it. Three D-class see it on a regular basis and tell their cellmates about it, scientists talk about it over coffee, and I think it's probably used for training. Not to mention the fact that, unless they regularly amnestize people after breaches, people have definitely been killed by this thing on Site, so they all know about it.
  • Big letters didn't work.
  • The document is an in-universe document, so I can analyze it as much as I want. Maybe throw in some additional comments by Elroy to provide a more clearly in-universe perspective, but probably not.
  • Add smoother transitions to improve flow.
  • Don't treat the hypotheses as true; Elroy doesn't know that I'm SCP-001, so even if he is writing my headcanon he doesn't know it's true. Instead of making a conclusion and assuming it's true, make sure that anything he says not clearly indicated by the evidence is clearly phrased as a hypothesis. If I can't conclude that something is true, I can't act like it is. Instead propose more tests.
  • Cut the extradimensional control nonsense, everything after the contact lenses. That's a totally separate idea from the quantum business.
  • Settle the Moto/Masipag question, or rephrase the footnote to exclude both and be clinical.
  • Stay on topic
  • Don't feel like "an SCPDeclassified article", whatever that means.
  • Break up the wall of text with intrusions of the frame narrative.
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