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Forum Link:
http://www.scpwiki.com/forum/t-13277776/the-children-of-the-labyrinthus
OOC AREA
This area is for checking the draft, and the primary conflicts since the last critique.
To-do list
- Add potential stakes for Foundation x Children conflict (The ship's not really built for children, ship neglect starting to show signs plus the trajectory is heading straight to crash)
- Shift focus to Foundation (attempt to reason out)
- Fix repetition
- Add climax of the event
- Fix the interviews
The general story must be the following:
- Children with spaceship arriving at the solar system
- Foundation detection
- Primary contact
- Conflict
- Negotiation stage
Special Containment Procedures: Any photographic evidence of SCP-XXXX's existence is to be immediately destroyed, and those in possession of the images are to be amnestized with Class C amnestics. LMaImb-Area-16 is the main lunar area to facilitate contact with SCP-XXXX. A team of three Foundation representatives and one Foundation-sponsored technician is to interact with the SCP-XXXX crew and replaced every six weeks.
As of 02/06/2020, there is no structure large enough to house SCP-XXXX. LMaImb-Area-16 is to observe the orbital location of SCP-XXXX around Mars and report any unusual discrepancy caused by the gravitational pull of SCP-XXXX.
Description: SCP-XXXX is a starship of extraterrestrial origin that resembles a 25 meters long, 40 meters wide triangular object. Four large structures were similar to military AA batteries located by the front of the ship. SCP-XXXX contains six humanoid-sized airlocks and two medium-sized hangars on both sides.
The halls of SCP-XXXX contain various piping and non-functioning monitors leading back to the control deck. The main control deck has designs found in various science fiction television programs found during the 20th Century.
SCP-XXXX's hull contains various damages due to contact in deep space. Ship debris recovered from the hull date the ship's creation to 7000-8000 years ago.
SCP-XXXX currently contains twenty-four crew members, who appear to be children with ages ranging from 9 to 16. Half of the crew members are confirmed to be of the opposite gender. There is a command hierarchy similar to a Navy vessel with nine crew members having important 'positions.' SCP-XXXX-01 is a 16-year old Caucasian male who serves as the captain of SCP-XXXX.
SCP-XXXX was first observed within the Kuiper Belt at ██/██/1994 at Astral Observatory AO-05. The team dedicated to studying SCP-2362 did not report SCP-XXXX. SCP-XXXX was detected again near Saturn due to interaction with its outer ring. SCP-XXXX deflected all obstacles as it traveled through the asteroid belt. Attempts to hail SCP-XXXX were fruitless until the distance between Earth and SCP-XXXX reached 600 million km. On ██/12/1998, radio transmissions successfully contacted SCP-XXXX.
[BEGIN LOG]
SCP-XXXX-01: This is Captain K█████ J. McKillard answering the message.
Command: This is Houston, responding to your call. Please standby as we confirm your identification, please. We have effectively more than half an hour delay, over.
SCP-XXXX-01: NASA? Wait, identification, sir?
Command: I need to confirm the identification of your spacecraft. Do you happen to know what the identification of your spacecraft is, sir?
SCP-XXXX-01: I'm not sure what its name or what type of ship it is. It's just a big ship.
Command: Will you tell us anything about your unidentified spacecraft other than its size then, Captain McKillard?
SCP-XXXX-01: Well, it's big enough for probably only twenty people, and, well… we just found out that we can go home.
Command: Can you explain what you mean by 'home'?
SCP-XXXX-01: Earth. I mean, it is where we were born. It's just that we have been stuck here for like, three years now.
SCP-XXXX-01: I mean, we're just not even less than sixteen years old but that is how things went. I don't even think we know what type of ship this is.
SCP-XXXX-01: Sir? Hello? Aren't you supposed to say something?
Command: Captain McKillard, please keep communication channels ready for further notice. We didn't plan for this.
[END LOG]
At ██/02/2000, O5 Command commissioned Orbital Task Force ネ-5 ("Shining Pearls") agents, led by Captain Ross Schmitt, to investigate SCP-XXXX. At ██/12/2000, OTF-ネ-5 successfully sent an orbital surveillance drone towards one of SCP-XXXX's entrances with a care package containing food, drinks, medicinal items, and clothing of various sizes. SCP-XXXX received fifteen care packages before OTF-ネ-5's shuttle was allowed access to dock in the western hangar.
Team Lead: Captain Ross Schmitt
Location: SCP-XXXX
Date: 2/12/2000
[BEGIN LOG]
Lieutenant Wiley: The ship's ready for its second trip, sir. Camera's also online.
Captain Schmitt: Good. (The camera pans around on Schmitt's shoulder as he turned.) Jesus, this hangar does not look good.
Lieutenant Wiley: And does that mean anything?
Captain Schmitt: Do make sure to watch your step. Don't want you guys to hit a pipe.
Technician Nadur: It's still in good condition, I admit.
Medic Mcfarlane: Hmm… (Mcfarlane leans down to a pipe and touches it) To be fair. I don't think I can live with this level of claustrophobia. And also, this seems to be not that well-made patch.
Captain Schmitt: Me too, but remember the mission. Our job is assessment, observation, and making sure these people who live here are not Russians but actual kids.
(A sound of walking amongst a humming sound was heard.)
Medic Mcfarlane: Hold positions. (The humming sound faded away.) Hmm, they don't seem that fine.
Lieutenant Wiley: Hey, look, a sign pointing towards the main deck. Looks like these kids had to rip out a panel for this one.
Technician Nadur: Or it's already there and they're messing with us. It's in what seems to be a mixture of five languages, are you recording this?
Captain Schmitt: Yeah.
(Technician Nadur chuckles before OTF-ネ-5 freezes at the sight of a pale girl.)
SCP-XXXX-██: Oh, hello.
Captain Schmitt: Hello. You children aren't Gru, right?
SCP-XXXX-██: What? What's 'grup'?
Technician Nadur: They don't know that. It's best to just lead us to your captain. Houston told us to check up on you guys to check what this ship is.
SCP-XXXX-██: Ah! The care packages. You four sent it? Well, follow me then! Captain's waiting for you. Also, no cameras until we manage to fix the electric thingies in the deck.
[END LOG]
Addendum:
At ██/12/2002, OTF-ネ-5 sent Dr. Alan McHayle to check the health of the SCP-XXXX crew. The following post-mission interview was performed regarding the state of SCP-XXXX's children.
Interviewee: Researcher Dr. Alan McHayle
Interviewer: Lunar Area-12 Psychologist Dr. James McAndres
Subject: Psychology Examination
[BEGIN LOG]
Dr. McAndres: State your name for the transcript.
Dr. McHayle: Dr. Alan McHayle. Level 3 Researcher assigned to SCP-XXXX.
Dr. McAndres: Thank you. Now, did something happen to you?
Dr. McHayle: No, not at all, but…
(Dr. McHayle sighs)
Dr. McHayle: My daughter was there.
Dr. McAndres: Are you sure, doctor?
Dr. McHayle: Yes. We reported her missing five years ago.
Dr. McAndres: I see. And this is something that troubles you?
Dr. McHayle: You don't know how much I'm relieved right now. I'd wish to bring her back.
Dr. McAndres: You know we can't do anything. I don't think O5 Command will let you do that. You know how space-faring SCPs work—
Dr. McHayle: (visibly panicked) Shut up for the second, all right, I checked everything there.
Dr. McAndres: I see. Do you want to tell me about it?
Dr. McHayle: So, my daughter gave me a tour, and her place is a mess, they're not supposed to be there. Do you know how things stick together like gravity? The ship's collapsing on itself, doc.
Dr. McAndres: Go on.
Dr. McHayle: I need to get the next shift to that ship. I need to tell the children. I need to get my daughter back. (McHayle stands up and attempts to open the door) Hey! Let me out!
Dr. McAndres: Dr. Alan McHayle, we're still trying to see if you're all right, please. Take a seat and take deep breaths. I don't want to tie you down and send you back home.
Dr. McHayle: (McHayle takes a few deep breaths as he sits back down) All right. I apologize. I wish those kids didn't have to stay that long there.
Dr. McAndres: All right, I'll add that to the report. Is there anything else you want to add to this conversation?
Dr. McHayle: Call for one Samantha McHayle in Site-77. She's going to be happy about this.
[END LOG]
List of collabs:
Special Containment Procedures:
Any confiscated XXXX is shipped towards the nearest storage site and placed in a secure opaque box appropriate to the size of the object. Any personnel handling an object is required for a mental examination before being returned to their position.
Under testing, the researcher will time the experiment for ten minutes and any observing personnel passing the time limit is immediately sent for rehabilitation.
Description:
An instance of XXXX has a thin layer of translucent white coating. Viewing through the white coating creates an illusion of a fogged floor. Illusionary items are recorded to appear within viewing distance of the user from the object itself.
The first recorded instance of XXXX was retrieved during an NCA investigation at [DATA EXPUNGED], England on 23/03/19██. NCA agents reporting seeing multiple objects at the evidence room over the course of a three-day period and a Foundation agent found the source at a confiscated wall mirror. After securing assets, the mirror was sent to Site-77 for further analysis.
Initial analysis reports a thin coating over the surface of the mirror. The results of the coating are inconclusive and the mirror was sent back to the NCA. The object in question was intercepted by a group called Cupid's Bow and was subsequently lost.
Another instance was discovered in Guildford, England on 03/09/19██ as in the form of a hand mirror. Similar incidences were reported and the object in question is sent to Site-77. Further testing on the hand mirror reveals similar inconclusive results but physical observation reveals a mental effect.
Mid-way through the second instance's verification, the same group who intercepted the wall mirror intercepted another suspected object from France before it was retrieved. On 25/01/19██, an [REDACTED] investigation was taken by Foundation agents after MI5 agents reported "seeing objects we wished we would want and suddenly disappearing when we check" while investigating the manor's destruction resulting in the death of its sole inhabitant. Investigations revealed the same coating from the objects previously obtained on various glassware objects from the house.
In the middle of the investigation, the group of interest Cupid's Bow was seen spotted in the area. Most of the anomalous items within the manor were soon found missing after the Foundation ordered to retrieve them to be supposedly shipped to Site-77. Site-77 only managed to retrieve five items from the manor investigation.
During an in-depth investigation, a [READ ERROR] was recovered from the basement. The flag had the same [READ ERROR] coating used as a reflective paint on its observe side creating a rectangular frame within a black-painted hand. Behind the hand was an arrow with similar features as ones seen in Cupid. Foundation Agents reported seeing the same symbol painted on the vehicles used by Cupid's Bow and [REDACTED] reports show that the [READ ERROR] was found around the world.
The solution for the glass coating was retrieved from a safe house found close to Site-77. The ingredients used [READ ERROR] the following:
- [DATA EXPUNGED]
- Salt
- [READ ERROR]
- [DATA EXPUNGED]
- [READ ERROR]
Addendum XXXX:
After a data breach and subsequent loss of various Foundation personnel, a backup of the page is currently being used as the moment. We are currently trying to track down where Cupid's Bow went, but until then, be aware of the black hand and make sure to surrender any suspicious reflective or transparent surface you find.
- Dr. ████
